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LJ Idol Week 17 Recs
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First off, I think it is awesome that some of my non-Idol friends are actually reading and commenting on my fellow contestants' posts. That is amazing of you and there is some really good and interesting writing going on.

This week's topic was "The Caged Bird." Here are a few of the entries that I would recommend.

cacophonesque wrote about the coolest outhouse ever.

diagenou wrote about a literal caged bird.

kittenboo wrote a personal tale of motherly affection and what it means.

phoenixejc wrote a continuation of a ghost story that stands alone of its own merits.

rattsu wrote about a real-life ghost town.

roina_arwen wrote about life with diabetes.

tamaraland wrote about a bird as a witness to abuse.

And I wrote a story about a bird and a girl.

You can read all the entries, vote for me and for other folks in the poll below the cut! I am doing very well so I am not too worried for me, but voting is very close this week and some of my favorite people are in a tight race. I'm sure anyone would appreciate a few tickies. Voting is due at 3 pm EST Saturday!

Also, any Idol contestant who wants concrit, please feel free to ask!


Poll #1536580 LJ Idol, Season Six, Merged Tribe, Week Seventeen
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I would like some constructive criticism. But not on my entries. Just on me.

Wear more purple, and stop eating so much asparagus. It makes your pee smell funny.

I like how "constructive criticism" turned into a personal attack on my pee. :(

Gosh, you are so sensitive. I wasn't attacking your pee, I was telling you how to improve it!

Well, maybe I think it's perfect the way it is. And I like asparagus!

I'd like concrit if you have any for me.

Sure! I liked the premise for you entry-- you had a really clever way of using the prompt to talk about an experience from your own life. I also like how you ended by drawing your own observations about what Megabyte's escape means to you on a larger scope...taking the specific and then drawing it out to the general works nicely as a closing.

If there's one thing I would change here, it's really that I wanted more...you could have fleshed this out into a longer entry and told it in narrative scenes like a story, with dialogue (Something like '"Something probably ate him," Mom said to me.' instead of 'My mom said something probably ate him...') I wanted to know more about Frank, and more about Megabyte's personality. I think it would have helped situate us in your world a little better.

I'd love some concrit. Tell it like it is. :)

I liked the concept for your piece, and I think it's interesting to hear about how people's brains work or don't work. I also think the essay format you used for it worked well.

I would have liked to see you delve more into specifics, hear more about that specific patient and what was done for her and whether it worked. Although I know that may be a doc/patient confidentiality issue. Instead, if that's not possible, I would have liked to hear more other specific cases-- other ways patients have built cages for themselves or tried to protect themselves. I felt like while the language is pretty, it veered a little too much off into generalization for me and I wanted it to come back to the lady with the cat.

That's really interesting, because you're hitting on the exact reason I find it so difficult to write about my work. I struggled to even write this, as I worry about exploiting someone for entertainment value. I almost felt that my description of her was too easily identifiable. Not to my readers here, but had she seen that, she would have known it was her.

Thanks for this. I really appreciate it.

Yeah, my mom is a principal of an elementary school, and she has the same problem talking about her work. She might have a particularly serious CPS case, and she has to be careful how much she says, because what if the person she's talking to actually knows the child or parents in question?

And no problem! I like being more critical, but I don't want to do it without requests because sometimes people don't want it.

Constructive criticism > fawning any day.

I agree! I try not to fawn in my comments unless I really mean it. I do try to be honest without being negative, though.

You struck a perfect balance.

I tend to fawn over your stuff because I'm an unabashed fanboy of your work. :)

I did not notice this! :D

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